Completely palindromic formal haiku - a real challenge

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Completely palindromic formal haiku - a real challenge

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Hi everyone, I just joined up because this looks like a good place to &#39;publish&#39; palindromic haiku. I&#39;ve seen some other attemps here, and they&#39;re good efforts, but they&#39;re made up of 3 seperate palindromic lines. It&#39;s a real challenge of cerebral fitness, but I&#39;ve managed to create a fairly meaningful one in formal haiku syllabic structure, and where the whole thing is palindromic across all three lines. Here goes: Enola draws dell If Reed&#39;s pool flows, as wolf loops Deer filled sward alone. I was inspired to submit to the mental rigour of making that after recently watching the &#39;Holoshop&#39; episode of Red Dwarf, in which Rimmer, after having the minds of two geniuses melded with his own, and newly sporting thickly-rimmed glasses and goatee, cheerfully said &quot;I wrote a palindromic haiku this morning&quot;.</p>

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Excellent!

Thank you, that's great.  I've seen a couple of attempts at palindromic haiku, though I assume the Red Dwarf reference was a joke.  Let's make it real!

Then again, as Dan Draisin said in our first issue, "Ukiah's pot tops haiku."  (Ukiah is a city in Northern California.)

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PALINDROMIC HAIKU

That's realy great and difficult to make. Congratulations! Here is two more haiku's made up also from palindromic lines (with translation to japanese):

1.
DEW ON ROSES OR NO, WED:
DRAB BUD, А DUB BARD,
SAW TIDE ROSE? SO RED IT WAS.

- TRANSLATION TO JAPANESE -
薔薇の露それとも違うもの、婚姻:
くすんだ茶色の芽、へぼ詩人
潮が満ちるのを見た?とても赤かったよ。

2.
SUN IS RED. NO WONDER SIN US.
PASSION, NO IS SAP.
NO SIGN IN EVENING IS ON.

- TRANSLATION TO JAPANESE -
太陽は赤、何があってもお咎めなし
受難、欲情はなし
夜の印一つだにないままに

(Dalibor Drekic, Belgrade, May, 2011.)
(Nyuusen in the 16TH Kusamakura international haiku competition, Kumamoto, Japan, 2011.)

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Glad you liked it

Hi there, nice to see your replies. Don't know why it didn't appear properly, all those & # 3 9 things masquerading as apostrophes messed it up. I will try again:

Enola draws dell
If Reed's pool flows, as wolf loops
Deer-filled sward alone

That was my second attempt. My first didn't have the correct syllabic structure, and is a bit more abstract and with vulgar imagery. I'll try and remember:

Rats emit pus
As tide-god's dog
Edits a sup-time star

I like the ones made up of 3 separate palindromes too, it might be a bit easier. One day I'll try writing a third one, but I have to be in the mood for a serious mental stretch and work-out. Guess not while I'm studying.

Red Dwarf didn't show the palindromic haiku, it was merely mentioned as a humourus example of high genius. Don't worry, if I ever claim high genius for myself, it will be humourous.

Wonder if mine would translate well into Japanese.....

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palindromic haiku

I have written quite a number of these with varying degrees of success and have posted several to my Twitter feed, Ailihphilia. Today's from mid-1990s:
Sonar posset, a/ lulu's sensuousness ul-/ ulates: sopranos!
Will add more in future. Full disclosure: I lived in Ukiah CA, aetat 4-7 (1976-'99). During that period began composing palindromes willy-nilly and conceived the notion of writing a real doozy upon which I embarked in earnest in my late teens. Still working on it!

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haiku

one of my more successful efforts in this line, from last fall:

Oak, dove, temple: hymn
In mutual autumn, in my
Helpmete vodka. O!